What I was feeling

Posts : 53 Join date : 2011-08-02 Age : 30

As most of you guys know, about 2 weeks ago me and my beloved had given up on what we had, you guys can guess what happened next..anyway, this poem was made through my feelings and inspired by another poet. -Enjoy

No, love is not dead in this heart these eyes and this mouth
that announced the start of its own funeral.
Listen, I've had enough of the picturesque, the colorful
and the charming.
I love love, its tenderness and cruelty.
My love has only one name, one form.
Everything disappears. All mouths cling to that one.
My love has just one name, one form.
And if someday you remember
O you, form and name of my love,
One day on the ocean between America and Europe,
At the hour when the last ray of light sparkles
on the undulating surface of the waves, or else a stormy night
beneath a tree in the countryside or in a speeding car,
A spring morning on the boulevard Malesherbes,
A rainy day,
Just before going to bed at dawn,
Tell yourself-I order your familiar spirit-that
I alone loved you more and it's a shame
you didn't know it.
Tell yourself there's no need to regret: Ronsard
and Baudelaire before me sang the sorrows
of women old or dead who scorned the purest love.
When you are dead
You will still be lovely and desirable.
I'll be dead already, completely enclosed in your immortal body,
in your astounding image forever there among the endless marvels
of life and eternity, but if I'm alive,
The sound of your voice, your radiant looks,
Your smell the smell of your hair and many other things
will live on inside me.
In me and I'm not Jon or Dalton

I'm me.

Subject: Re: What I was feeling Wed 10 Aug 2011, 3:58 am

Masterful.

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Leon- Master of Poetry and DANCE

Posts : 53 Join date : 2011-08-02 Age : 30

Suffering will do that to you.

Subject: Re: What I was feeling Wed 10 Aug 2011, 12:51 pm

Leon wrote:: Suffering will do that to you.

I've never thought you were an emo D:

good piece btw :P

Posts : 53 Join date : 2011-08-02 Age : 30

Volcanus wrote:

Leon wrote:: Suffering will do that to you.

I've never thought you were an emo D:

good piece btw :P

I'm not emo, just been through shit so I thought I'd write down what I was feeling, If that's what you call emo then I don't know what to tell you.

Subject: Re: What I was feeling Wed 10 Aug 2011, 3:26 pm

Leon wrote:

Volcanus wrote:

Leon wrote:: Suffering will do that to you.

I've never thought you were an emo D:

good piece btw :P

I'm not emo, just been through shit so I thought I'd write down what I was feeling, If that's what you call emo then I don't know what to tell you.

sorry if I offended you.

I dont really like to admit it, but I am an emo sometimes, and by emo I dont meen those guys/girls who's wearning dark color clothes and have wierd dark thoughts!

nothing wrong with a guy to be emotional.

Posts : 53 Join date : 2011-08-02 Age : 30

Volcanus wrote:

Leon wrote:

Volcanus wrote:

Leon wrote:: Suffering will do that to you.

I've never thought you were an emo D:

good piece btw :P

I'm not emo, just been through shit so I thought I'd write down what I was feeling, If that's what you call emo then I don't know what to tell you.

sorry if I offended you.

I dont really like to admit it, but I am an emo sometimes, and by emo I dont meen those guys/girls who's wearning dark color clothes and have wierd dark thoughts!

nothing wrong with a guy to be emotional.

That's a stereo type man, emo people are EMOtional people, that doesn't mean they wear black and stuff like that. (Goth)

Subject: Re: What I was feeling Wed 10 Aug 2011, 9:32 pm

Yo. Dont fuck up Goth and Emo. They're not anything near the same thing. >.>

Posts : 94 Join date : 2011-07-27

Thats true, emo kids cut themselves. Goth kids cut YOU.

Subject: Re: What I was feeling Thu 11 Aug 2011, 5:44 am

-sigh-

seriously, if I offended any of you or someone else! just learn to live with it cuz I don't care!

and yes I thought emos and goths are the same!

cuz well, we don't have them around here, well publicy to be more accurate.

Posts : 8 Join date : 2011-08-01 Location : Louyang

Welp, it is a common misconception. I usually mess up between the two once in a while.

This is stereotyping from my conception of emo and goth:

Emo- people with long fringes that cover one eye who write poetries about pain

Goth- people with dark clothes and black nails who write poetries about black soul miasma

Pardon my sudden stereotyping, HolyDay, Meow and I are supposed to be doing our assignments and I'm finding a reason to slack.

But anyway. back to topic: I think you write good poetry, Mes/Leon person.